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Seventy Three
"'Jacin.' Cinder's tone was full of warning. 'Iko did not sacrifice herself so you crash us into a crater and kill us both'
'Calm down. I know what I'm doing' he responded, pretending to be calm while his heart was a hammer pounding in his chest. ....."
Oh! I'm so sorry. I didn't know that you had starting filming me. Look, my hair is a mess! Uh, never mind, let's just film this thing.
Today was so much fun, well, in between the rainy hours. First, in the morning, we did what every normal person does in the morning; we ate breakfast, brushed our hair, well most of us. After that, we had an hour of our own time, you know, reading, watching movies, the usual. Then we went to a lake. I'm not sure which lake it was, but it was in a beautiful, green forest and it was extremely fun there.The water was the color of dark sap and tree bark mixed together. It was wonderful! I tried to teach Isabella how to dive, but that didn't quite work out.
After we were done, we went to a little town nearby and had lunch there. While we were eating, it started raining, no not raining, um pouring. Yes that's the word, pouring. Soon, when the rain was gone and it felt like it didn't even happen. When we finished our lunches, we drove to our friends' house. We had a lot of fun there, for a few hours at least.
Then we suddenly became really tired, so we went beck home. Dad was already there, so first we had dinner and then we walked over to my great-grandma's house to say goodbye to my aunt who is leaving tomorrow. Now I must bid you all a goodnight.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand CUT!
Oh, that was hard. Wait are you still filming? CUT! CUT! I said CUT!
Seventy Three
"'Jacin.' Cinder's tone was full of warning. 'Iko did not sacrifice herself so you crash us into a crater and kill us both'
'Calm down. I know what I'm doing' he responded, pretending to be calm while his heart was a hammer pounding in his chest. ....."
Oh! I'm so sorry. I didn't know that you had starting filming me. Look, my hair is a mess! Uh, never mind, let's just film this thing.
Today was so much fun, well, in between the rainy hours. First, in the morning, we did what every normal person does in the morning; we ate breakfast, brushed our hair, well most of us. After that, we had an hour of our own time, you know, reading, watching movies, the usual. Then we went to a lake. I'm not sure which lake it was, but it was in a beautiful, green forest and it was extremely fun there.The water was the color of dark sap and tree bark mixed together. It was wonderful! I tried to teach Isabella how to dive, but that didn't quite work out.
After we were done, we went to a little town nearby and had lunch there. While we were eating, it started raining, no not raining, um pouring. Yes that's the word, pouring. Soon, when the rain was gone and it felt like it didn't even happen. When we finished our lunches, we drove to our friends' house. We had a lot of fun there, for a few hours at least.
Then we suddenly became really tired, so we went beck home. Dad was already there, so first we had dinner and then we walked over to my great-grandma's house to say goodbye to my aunt who is leaving tomorrow. Now I must bid you all a goodnight.
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand CUT!
Oh, that was hard. Wait are you still filming? CUT! CUT! I said CUT!